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14 July 2008 @ 09:56 am
Breathe 12 - For Better or Worse  
Title: Breathe
Pairing: Will/Skandar, Anna/OFC
Rating: NC-17
Summary: For better or worse, they said.
Disclaimer: Not mine, not real! It's FICTION.
Warnings: Sex.
A/N: Breathe is the sequel series to 'Chronicles of Skandar'. Read that first! Read earlier chapters - Breathe.

A Chronicle of Skandar and William
Chapter 12 – For Better or Worse
Skandar and William burst through a storage room door at the back of the club. Their lips were locked on one another in an angry, passionate duel for control. They could hardly figure out where they were going. They crashed against the wall, blindly kicking the door shut behind them. Whenever Skandar tried to break the kiss, William growled and cupped Skandar’s face tighter, holding the kiss. Whenever William tried to break the kiss, Skandar grunted in annoyance and resumed the kiss again.
Somehow Skandar managed to pry his lips free, allowing for William to pull his shirt off and toss it aside. Skandar’s lips moved down William’s chest, his tongue swirling around the hardened nipple. His cock was straining in his pants he was so turned on at being able to lick and kiss William’s body. He’d never found one that could top it. 
Without warning or much finesse at all, Skandar had William’s pants around his knees. He stared at that raging hard cock as if it was the first time he’d ever seen it. He shoved his face into William’s groin, drunk with desire. He nuzzled the low hanging balls his husband possessed, inhaling their scent as his mouth made rough nips and bites. Finally after licking from base to tip, Skandar’s warm mouth descended over William’s cock. 
“Guh, fuck!” William grunted, slapping his hands against the wall to brace himself.
William’s knees were already weak from drinking too much, so the sudden and shock inducing sensation of receiving head from the only man he’d ever been in love with, was making his knees begin to buckle. Skandar slapped William’s bare ass as if to jerk him back upright, before he resumed sucking with fervour.   His tongue swirled around the bulbous and sensitive head, causing William to shriek with the ecstasy. Skandar himself was rather drunk with lust, revelling in the knowledge he’d soon be gifted with William’s thick, creamy sperm. He felt like a whore, on his knees in some random storage room, but he didn’t care. All he cared about was that the cock he was sucking was the only cock he really ever wanted to suck in his life.
William was already close to cumming even before Skandar started bathing his cock in a mouth sent from heaven. Yet the moment two of Skandar’s slick fingers jammed roughly up his ass, he let out a sharp piercing cry and shot his load down Skandar’s throat. Skandar jerked in surprise, gasping and near choking on the sudden rush of cum being emptied into him. 
“Teacup, I ... uh ... shit!” William cried out, his fists clenching with worrying intensity.
Barely giving William time to recover, Skandar pulled off and used some of William’s own sperm and his saliva to lube up his cock. William was still lost in the aftermath of his intense orgasm when Skandar flipped him to face the wall. Kicking William’s legs apart, Skandar pressed the head of his cock against William’s ass and pushed in just slightly. William winced in surprise, not properly prepared for what was to come. 
Suddenly Skandar slammed his cock in balls deep up William’s ass. He reached around to cover William’s mouth as William let out a loud, agonizing scream of pain. Skandar was too drunk to pay it much heed, and William was too drunk to notice the pain completely. William breathed hard against the wall, tears pricking his eyes as he began to sob. Skandar rutted into him, pants around his ankles as his pale hips jammed forward. William was nearly naked, with his pants around his feet and his shoes the only items of clothing he had on. Skandar still had his shirt on and his own pants were down by his shoes. 
This was not a session of making love. It was a fuck, short and brutal. Skandar buried his head in the back of William’s shoulder, grunting with each thrust. William was shaking from his crying, letting out a pained wail on one particularly powerful thrust. He reached behind him to try and find one of Skandar’s hands, grabbing it as if it were a lifeline to some form of intimacy. Skandar smacked his hand away and wrapped his arms around William’s chest as he continued to fuck him. 
“Ow!” William sobbed, gasping breathlessly, “Skan ... please ... it hurts.”
“I thought my dick was too small to hurt.” Skandar grunted, driven by lust and clouded by alcohol, “Want me to stop?”
“No!” William begged, pleaded, breathing hard, “No, no. Cum in me. In me.”
So that is exactly what Skandar did, but not before he placed a heated kiss on William’s shoulder, right over his tattoo. With a low moan, Skandar erupted inside William, his legs shaking as orgasm ripped through him. After a few moments, Skandar pulled out, frowning at the slightly bloody tinge on his cock. He grabbed a box of toilet rolls on of the shelves and pulled one out to clean his cock off. He tried to do the same to William’s ass, wiping his leaking cum and small specks of blood off.
“Ow, ow, it’s okay.” William winced, pulling his pants up with a little difficulty, “Th ... thank you.”
“Mmm.” Skandar grunted in response, feeling as if he was about to pass out, sitting on the floor, “Coming home ... wif ... you.”
For all the quick, ugly, loveless sensations involved in their storage room tryst, Skandar’s simple statement made it all worth it. William was feeling suddenly more aware of what was happening. He stared down at Skandar, whose pants were still around his ankles. 
“We just had sex!” William shrieked suddenly, grinning madly, “Oh my God! Teacup!”
“Two sugar.” Skandar mumbled, letting out a yawn, “No milk.”
”Skan, get up, I can’t carry you, I’m too drunk and my ass is on fire.” 
“I’m too fucked.” Skandar whined, “Where’s my beer?”
William pulled out his cell phone to call a taxi to wait outside the club. He knelt beside Skandar, wincing in discomfort. It had been a long time since his ass was used as an entry. Though it was horribly unfair, Skandar usually bottomed. William figured he deserved to be on the receiving end tonight, and frankly he’d take anything he could get from Skandar. He felt so happy he wanted to cry and that’s exactly what he did as he fumbled to get Skandar’s pants up.
“Will, Will.” Skandar whispered, hand moving to caress William’s cheek, “Don’t ... cry. I’m sure we can ... find ... more beer.”
William burst with teary laughter as he helped Skandar to his feet, “You’re a dick, Skandar. I love you.”
“I love dick too, Sweetheart.” Skandar nodded, putting his arm around William’s shoulder, “More beer.”
“More at home, I promise.” 
“I better come wif then, aye? Heehee.” Skandar giggled, “Hey ... guess what?”
“What, Skan?”
“I’m drunk.”
“I’m halfway there too.” William laughed, helping Skandar back through the club.
William caught sight of Sarah and Anna having a giggle with some of their friends. He gave Sarah a thumbs up and a grin, which caused Sarah to stand up and start cheering loudly. William grinned and mouthed an ‘I love you’ to her and Anna, before he continued leading Skandar out.
“More beer!” Skandar grinned, breaking away from William to rush for the bar.
“Skandar!” William gasped, laughing as he grabbed his hand, “Taxi’s outside!”
“But I want more!” Skandar whined, pouting, “I’m having fun!”
“I thought you wanted to come home with me.”
“Is there beer?” Skandar asked with a raised eyebrow.
“Skan, it’s our house, remember?”
“Shitloads of beer!” Skandar grinned, jumping onto William and wrapping his legs around his waist, “You’re so damn hot. We should fuck.”
“We just did!”
“We did?” Skandar laughed as William carried him toward the entrance, “Oh shit we did!”
Skandar’s head was moving from side to side and his hands were swaying as he danced to the music. William smiled happily, finding the strength to carry Skandar with ease. Skandar was smiling stupidly, letting the music in the club take over his body. William suddenly felt the urge to stay. Skandar truly seemed happy and he didn’t want to end his night prematurely. The choice was soon taken from him when Skandar jumped off William and started dancing away.
“No doubt you play it real cool, Baby ...” Skandar sang, dancing rather coherently for someone who felt anything but, “Jive with me, Will! Yo!”
“Skandar!” William laughed, shaking his head and following after Skandar.
Just when William thought they were in for an extended stay, he realized Skandar was dancing his way toward the entrance. He took William’s hands and led them in a dance out of the club and onto the sidewalk. Grinning, Skandar’s head continued to sway from side to side as his hands pulled William closer.
“Will, Will!” Skandar said suddenly as they tumbled into the back of the taxi.
“What, Teacup?” William asked after he’d given the driver his address, “Are you okay?”
“Will!” Skandar gasped, eyes wide, “We should do this again!”
William laughed at the genuine sense of amazement in Skandar’s eyes, “You’re right! We should!”
“Bah bow, bah bow.” Skandar sang, still bopping along to music that existed only in his head. 
William turned on his side so he could watch Skandar. He couldn’t help but smile contently, watching Skandar’s animated hand motions as he made up a song and danced to it even as he sat. It was rather endearing for William to see. 
Even when they arrived at their beachside home, Skandar was still bopping. He danced his way from the taxi into the house and right into the bar downstairs. Grabbing as much beer as he could carry, he continued dancing his way upstairs to the deck. He let out a loud wolf cry for no other reason except he felt like it.
“Will, I just helped myself to a shitload of your beer, Baby!” Skandar screamed into the house, realizing he’d left William at the taxi to pay for it, “Is my guitar still in the same place!?”
William emerged onto the deck, carrying Skandar’s guitar. He hadn’t changed anything since Skandar had moved out, and the reminder of the fact he didn’t live here only served to annoy William. He handed Skandar’s guitar to him and sat down on the deck, opening them both a bottle of beer. Smiling contently, he watched as Skandar’s fingers moved deftly over the strings and his deep voice began to sing.
Help me if you can, I’m feeling down ...” Skandar sang, “... and I do appreciate you being around. Help me if ...”
“Something happier?” William suggested, “Let me guess, you sang that a lot while I was AWOL?”
“Mmm.” Skandar nodded, still smiling as he strummed another tune on the guitar, “Where are we? What the hell ... is going on? The dust ... has only ... just ... begun to fall. Crop circles in the parapet. Sinking ... healing. Hide and ... seek ...”
William closed his eyes and let his senses be filled by all that was his Teacup. Skandar’s guitar playing and voice resonated through William’s soul. It felt so good to be home, and to have Skandar here with him. It just felt right, but still the nagging sensation deep down that this was only a transitory moment of bliss still occupied William’s thoughts. He opened his eyes, to find Skandar smiling curiously and staring at him, no longer singing or playing.
“You ok?” Skandar asked, smiling brightly as he drank more of his beer, “I wrote a song for you too.”
“Let me guess. ‘Will’s an asshole, an asshole, an asshole’?” William chuckled.
“Nah, that one will be for my post divorce efforts.” Skandar grinned before he cleared his throat, drank more beer and then started plucking the guitar strings as if to find the right note.
I’m counting the sand
Watching it falling
Over and out of my hands
All the sunlight has gone
The stars are calling
I wonder if I’ll be free
We’ve been struggling now
Can’t see the clearing
I wonder if we’ll be free
There’s no need for duress
We can still be here somehow
Want you today
Want you today
I wonder if you will ever be free
Want you today
Want you today
My love is here, it’s waiting just for you
Just for you
Sometimes I wish it wasn’t true
When my body is cold,
Aching and lonely,
All that I need is you.
Can’t escape from you now,
I know you’ll find me somehow.
Come home to me now
Come home to me now
My love is here, it’s waiting for you
Come home to me now
Come home to me now
My love is here, it’s waiting just for you
Just for you
Oh I wish it wasn’t true
Want you today
Want you today
My love is here, it’s waiting just for you
Just for you
I know it’ll always be true
Skandar’s eyes were closed by the time he sang the last word and played the last note. He took a deep breath, feeling somewhat sombre after singing that song and feeling as if he’d just gotten a hug weight off his chest by doing so. He turned to William, gulping nervously before he realized William was staring at him with eyes that were filled with sadness.
“Teacup ... that was ... so beautiful.” William gasped, simply amazed, “Heartbreaking and beautiful. Oh my God.”
William was stunned by the potency of the words, by the truth of the song. It almost felt like a cry for help right out of Skandar’s soul. While the song was heartbreaking and made him feel immeasurable guilt for effectively abandoning Skandar during their marriage, the last line gave him a bright glimmer of hope. Would it always be true?
“Will it really always be true?” William asked softly, reaching over to cover Skandar’s hand with his own.
“For better or worse.” Skandar whispered, staring desolately at the ground.
Skandar set his guitar down and finished off the last of his beer. Without a word he stood to his feet and grabbed his coat. William let out a sigh, but he didn’t try to stop Skandar leaving. He didn’t think he had much right to anymore.
“I ... I’m sorry.” William said softly, standing to his feet, “If it’s ... any consolation, I ... I came home. Maybe a bit late, but I came home.”
“And if I came home, how long would it be until you left us again? I can’t risk loving you and losing you again. I’m not that strong, Will.” 
William lowered his eyes in shame, frowning. He raised them again to see Skandar leaving, but this time he moved to stop him. He turned Skandar to him just before he made it into the house. He was about to say something when Skandar shook his head, as if to tell him not to speak. William desperately wanted to, but he acquiesced to Skandar’s request.
“For better or worse.” Skandar whispered, more to himself than to William, “That’s what we said to each other.”
“We’ve had a lot of worse, Teacup, so don’t you think it’s time we both tried for a little better?” William pleaded, his eyes doing it more than his words ever could, “I’ve failed you. I’ve failed our family. You can’t risk loving me and losing me again? I can’t imagine ever being happy if you didn’t love me again. If you give me a hope, Skan, I will give you everything I have. Just give me a hope. Please.”
Skandar pondered William’s request for a few moments. Did William really understand the gravity of what he was asking? Skandar believed he did. Though both of them were extremely intoxicated, they both understood what was being implied here. There were no dramatic declarations of love and eternal forgiveness. There were no bended knee pleads of desperation. All there was, was a simple nod from Skandar to William. That was all. Yet for William, that was enough. That was everything. That was a hope.

- To Be Continued -
A/N: I wrote Skandar's song, I hope you like it!  Sorry it was so short, but I thought it was fitting for this chapter.  This wasn’t supposed to come so soon, but travelling about can be rather inspiring, so here you are. Not long to go now! Comments are love.
elexandros: Nerdy Narniaelexandros on July 13th, 2008 10:19 pm (UTC)
This chapter was utter guh. It doesn't have to be long, its powerful as is, drunk and all. (Its true.)
It started off so quick and dirty and with all sorts of man-parts (*giggle*) but then it got silly and so *skandalous* and then turned into utter love. How you can work that all into something like this is beyond me. Mastership, I say, mastership!
I'm SO glad this happened for them. Sarah does know best, she had to have known this would happen. A single taste of our Will and Skan is addicting, isn't it? Good. Now they're back home and working even closer to being one solid married entity again.
I'm so glad you posted. ^.^
suborbitalsuborbital on July 14th, 2008 11:42 am (UTC)
Mastership! For some reason that made me think of an OTP. Get it? Get it!? Well, hard to believe, but in this little series between CoS and Breathe, I believe Sarah has known Skan for 10 years? Wowsers. I'm so glad I posted too. I must've had some good advice to post what I had :D *squishssquish*
elexandros: Nerdy Narniaelexandros on July 14th, 2008 11:14 pm (UTC)
It took me a moment but now I get it :D

And you should always listen to that little voice over your shoulder. ;) *smoooshles*
kiddobill on July 13th, 2008 11:33 pm (UTC)
Dear Sub,
I would just like to inform you, that if I ever figure out who you are and meet you randomly in the street, RUN. This is only a warning, because if i see you, i will chase you, tackle you, scream like a little fan girl, and kiss you! Just thought you should know.
Sincerely, kiddoBill
now that the formalities are over, i must say the past two chapters are amazing. The minor rape, cuz it obviously wasn't really rape, was perfect for what they both needed. Skan's a horrible drunk, but none the less *two thumbs up*
Anna, you gave the chick balls! big big BIG balls! lol Sarah, oh sarah. I know people want a petey and an eddy and they're great don't get me wrong, BUT I WANT A SARAH!!! lol
The song! omg the song! perfect! The "just for you" innuendo of Will's tat, amazing. Man oh man oh man! Sub, joo crazy! and i love it. i mean, there is still alot to worry about. no doubt. But this is a real relationship and I'm proud to say the least of Will that's he's stepped up his act. Skan's got more than enough reason to be edgy, but if they were to divorce and all that horrific jazz, they just care too much about eachother and even unknowly are more than just drunkenly attracted to each other. Given the backgrounds you've made, they seem like the type that if worst came to worst, they'd still be completely in love and want nothing more that the "good ole days", which don't seem long gone i might add.
Ok i know this comment is running long, and there's so much more i could say and i should be studying right now, but sub, just love the hope. I've always looked for hope in the ending. not happily ever after, but hope that there is an after that is happy, if that makes any sense.
So i guess over all the main thing to do is just *hug sub*
love you sub, take care and thanks so much for story.
suborbitalsuborbital on July 14th, 2008 12:02 pm (UTC)
UH OH! lol

Skan is indeed a horrible drunk. Yay someone wants a Sarah! lol. She's one of those characters that people tend to go >> or << toward. Maybe because she's a girl and tight with Skandiepants. My memory is failing me right now, but did you read CoS before you read Breathe? Or did you just jump right into the sequel?

Thank you so much for your comment! I'm so happy you enjoy the story.
kiddobill on July 14th, 2008 01:51 pm (UTC)
i read CoS first but i didn't have a livejournal account then. when i saw breathe, i caved and joined in to follow it. Actually after reading this chapter, my paranoia for the worst set in and i curled up in bed the lab top and read from CoS back to now. lol.
unfortunately, my paranoia was not abaded. *cries and shakes fists in air*
the person who introduced me to CoS won't even touch breathe for the same fears. Honestly i'm a bit of tough cookie and don't cry to easily, so when this story made me cry right off the bat, i was hooked. now breathe is owning me in the worst possible way, and i'm dying to see what happens, although terrified with each new chapter lol.
You're a wonderful writer sub. really keep me on the edge my seat...which btw i think i actually fell out on one occasion...i don't remember which chapter did it, but it was early on in breathe. then again, i'm clumsy like that.
finally, yes. i want a sarah. ...and perhaps an anna. >_> lol. in the odd light thought, I think sarah kinda reminds me of my sister 0.o
very odd, kinda creepy, but love them both ntl, and love the story. kill me gently sub, the pen is mightier than the sword.
take care
P.S. sry if i'm a bit melodramatic, it's the theater geek in me.
who breaks a butterfly upon a wheel: pevensieslaminy on July 13th, 2008 11:53 pm (UTC)
Oh my god, Skandar nodded. That is enough. God, he's such a stupid drunk though. At first, at the beginning, when William said that it hurt, I wasn't sure if this was all going to take a turn for the seriously dramatic, but I was happy to see that he was into it too.

I cannot believe that song though; oh my gosh, that is so perfect. Just the image of him playing guitar, singing to William is amazing enough. They still are so in love. And I love it.
suborbitalsuborbital on July 14th, 2008 12:01 am (UTC)
i'm so glad you like that song! I spent hours working on writing it. I was even going to record myself and me old guitar singing it so people would get the tune, but I didn't think that would be kind to them lol.

No, not dramatic, just stupidly drunk and horny and that sort of thing. The alternative would be a bit icky for me!
lighttheshadows on July 14th, 2008 01:20 am (UTC)
Gabanishka *drool*
That is pretty much all I have to say.
And the nod. *sighs&

I like how realistic this is in coming together. I mean I would love it if they were suddenly just back in adoring love with each other, but I can believe this. Even if my heart does occasionally twinge.

I really enjoyed Skandars song as well. It's wonderful for them.
suborbitalsuborbital on July 14th, 2008 12:13 pm (UTC)
Gabanishka! I love it!

I'm so glad you enjoyed the song. I wasn't sure if I should write a song for them, but we know Skandar is musically inclined so I didn't think it was too much of a stretch.

I'm also very glad about the fact you like the tone of them coming together. That really means a lot. Thanks so much.
silverbluewings on July 14th, 2008 04:30 am (UTC)
I really don't know what to say, how to write it or anything at all I'm in shock right now, I cannot tell you how beautiful this chap was even though it has some minor consented rape, the song was OMG!! You are an amazing writer really, I don't know what else to say and usually I am not a person who goes speechless, I'm so glad that those two are back together and that their IS HOPE for their love.

Pd: I'll like to say that I ditto kiddobill. =)

Silver Blue.
suborbitalsuborbital on July 14th, 2008 12:15 pm (UTC)
Yay the song! :D I'm so glad you liked it. I wrote it especially for them and this story. Hope is good! Thank you :D
numptysmegnumptysmeg on July 14th, 2008 01:39 pm (UTC)
That only took me something like 7 hours to read.. probably a bit more cause I stopped reading at 4am to sleep a bit lol

Awww they're so cute. I feel sorry for both of them because Skan was trying then started being a poophead, and will started as a poophead and then tried

GAH let them be happy! :)
suborbitalsuborbital on July 25th, 2008 04:38 am (UTC)
Lol wow, you're dedicated! And you're right, it's like a switcheroo haha.
Young & Restlesswhiteoutwalls on July 15th, 2008 03:05 pm (UTC)
So...it's definetly a bad idea to read your story in a public library because I literally yelled for joy at the end of this chapter.

Loved Skandar's song by the way.
suborbitalsuborbital on July 25th, 2008 04:38 am (UTC)
I'm glad you liked the song :D and the ending! Thank you :D
hotfruits: renobhotfruits on July 18th, 2008 07:16 am (UTC)
I love this, so very much. Can't wait for the next bit <33
suborbitalsuborbital on July 25th, 2008 04:37 am (UTC)
Thank you! :D
rakz_87 on July 20th, 2008 07:59 pm (UTC)
Finally i've caught up. Been reading this like for the last 3 and a half weeks. Been up 'till 3 in the morning trying to read as much, but finally i'm here!!! Btw this is gunna be quite long so bear with me.lol.

Anyway, so yeah WOW. You are such an excellent write *takes a bow*
I mean seriosly starting from CoS. That was totally FAB. From the beggining, the absolute angst from Skandar, the way he fealt and the misunderstanding from both sides. To the way you finally brought the two together for what fealt only for second to the time they spent apart. The love they shared in that time just fealt so real. It was tangible. As if it were for real, and it was actually happening. I just fealt so happy when they got together, made me cry *sob*.

And then the part which im sure everyone dreaded the most. When Will came in and broke it off from him. It was so raw and hurt soooo much. I swear i've never cried so much in my life. I just fealt like finiding William and smashing him up, all the while telling myself it isn't real, and wondering why i was getting so worked up. It was such a weird moment for me. Literally laughing at myself and crying at the same time, it was soo weird. I couldn't read the rest, i had to force myself, just so i knew if anything came out of it. Of coarse there wasn't not 'till so long after.

Then the end. This was beyond belief. I have to buy a hat and take it off to you *claps* It was just absalute brilliance the way it all came together. With the fake relationship between Skan and Sarah. Totally throws you off the even thought of the two ever making it back together. But then somehow you did it. I actually read the first half of the final chapter before reading any of CoS. And all throughout the story i just kept thinking how could Skandar marry anyone else. Of course your brilliance does it again. Bringing the two together without the other realsing, and the Wedding day itself. Just pure brilliance. taken from your story-

Skandar turned his eyes back toward the J.P., before speaking nonchalantly, “William, you’re standing in the wrong place.”

“Oh, sorry.” apologized William, feeling rather embarrassed, moving to the outside of Skandar and back a step, “Ok. Carry on.”

“That’s not the right place.”

“Oh … umm … where would you like me to stand?”

“Beside me.” Skandar said with an anxious gasp, “Usually when people get married, they stand next to each other.”

And OMG my heart nearly jumped out of my chest. I swear i never saw this coming. It was like so funny and yet again there you go surprising us with the biggest thing that could happen, that everyone thought could not happen make happen. And it was like some fairy Godmother (in the shape of you) granted everyones wish and gave us not just a happy ending but and ending that was beyond words.

Ok, i know this soooo dragging but now onto Breathe!!!! hee hee. Anyway you always said reviews are luff. Well i hope this shows how much i luff you.

cont. below
rakz_87 on July 20th, 2008 08:00 pm (UTC)
Rest of of my LUFF!!!!
Anyway so yeah. The beggining well it kinda takes one by surprise. The kids, the careers and they way they have kinda drifted apart. Going through the story showing how much they indeed care about one another but not able to fully appreciate the other because of what they have done. At the start of their relationship there wasn't so much holding them apart really because it (their love) was so young so their wasn't much one could keep on the other, but seven years later. Well alot has happened to be built up and well vented to the other. It's so starnge to think of their love, and how perfect it seems and now. Well obviously changes have happend and this Chapter does leave one quite hopeful, but wrongly, in the sense that you know (because you're writing it) that something is gunna go terribly wrong. And well although i'm happy for them , i don't want to take it too high, purely because of CoS 14 Choices. The ways it invoked such emotions and well this "chronicle" is so much darker than CoS and so leaves me feeling somewhat reserved and wary of what your capable of. Anyway i think that wraps it up. Oh quickly love Eddy and Petey, both totally cute Especially that part between Petey and Mandy in "KIDS SAY THE DARNDEST THINGS" so totally cute. With the other Dad and such. Funny as fudge.lol. And then Eddy with the "Meh punch ooh face", i even use that in real life.lol. I know sad but the effect you seem to have on me. Sarah is soo totally kool. Was getting on my nerves a bit when she was always in Skadars corner even when Will was soo trying but now, well she so totally knows best considering what she has done. Anna, well the glue that keeps all together. Without her im not sure lot could have stayed as "amicable" as they could, even with the fights.lol.

Anyway can't wait for the next Chapter, keep up the good work, and oh yeah greta song!!! Xx
suborbitalsuborbital on July 25th, 2008 11:20 am (UTC)
Re: Rest of of my LUFF!!!!
Lol @ your comments about Breathe. You are so right. It is a darker Chronicle than CoS was. I am very evil and not to be trusted! :D Wow, thank you so much for your comment! It makes me so very happy when people go to such lengths in feedback. And it helps me see how other people see my writing. And you read Sarah and Anna so well too in your comment. Thank you so much for this!
rakz_87 on July 25th, 2008 09:18 pm (UTC)
Re: Rest of of my LUFF!!!!
Oh your sooo welcome.I love this story, just needed to write something to(for?) you!!!!And really to get it off my chest, as you can imagine it was bulding, and not in the nice way.lol. God, i can't believe you did write "Breathe" after soo long though. Because with it being like 2 years since you did write CoS, and also although i was hoping you would it seemed to have ended. Coming to the End of CoS, although it was soo totally excellent, i just didn't want it to end, and then you wrote the next part, BREATHE, and although i remember you said it would be short, i love how, i presume, that because there is soo much to it you cant let it finish, and i love it!!! Keep it going, gives me another reason to sat up till 3 and READ!!!! love ya, Xx

btw, when is the next part due????, please tel us a guestimate date!!!!
Delysflclinutri on October 19th, 2008 08:07 am (UTC)
Can you believe I waited until this to read Breathe? xD

I just kept crying and crying ever since you started writing this thing, so then I just stopped, my tear ducts need some rest y'know? But yaay, not so sad now!

Can't wait for the next part! That fucking sounded like it hurt though! And I admit, I did tear up a bit when Peter was crying.
silvereign: cornovagliasilvereign on October 22nd, 2008 08:02 pm (UTC)
This fic is SO brilliant. This is the first time EVER I'm reading RPS and it's a blessing I chose your fic, because it's amazing. I'm a little sad you're not updating your page anymore (I hope you've not lost your interest in this fandom, it would be a pity), because I just love your fanfics, you really capture love, brotherhood and friendship in a unique way.
I think it would be a stupid question (especially if you really lost your interest) if I ask you when are you updating this fic, or when are you posting a new one, but I have to, sorry. Feel free not to answer me, though.

A faithful reader of yours since 2006. Sincerely, Silverempire.
suborbitalsuborbital on October 22nd, 2008 08:46 pm (UTC)
I haven't lost interest in the fandom at all. I will finish this fic, but right now I'm a little devoid of free time to write, unfortunately. If I was to leave the fandom, it would be after my stories are finished. Don't worry, I'll be back :) Thanks for your comment!
silvereignsilvereign on October 24th, 2008 09:30 pm (UTC)
Thanks for answering me! I'm so relieved now! :)
Sorry if my comment seemed too (I don't know how to say it..) "pushy", I didn't want to know your reasons, I was just wondering...(Hope you were not offended)
Anyway, this was just to say that you will still have a faithful reader when you begin writing again !!
(Anonymous) on November 17th, 2008 02:35 pm (UTC)
really good
I'm not really a fan of bi or gay stuff. but i guess the skandar-will pairing got me hooked. whenever i try reading ben-will or skandar-ben, it just... doesn't seem right. i guess your writing just really rocks... and i loved COS. now, i'm eagerly awaiting your update to breathe. cheers!!!!
rakz_87 on November 27th, 2008 01:29 am (UTC)
The suffering
How long will you prolongue this torture. Its been months!!! Please, have you nothing to post. Not even a paragraph, sentance, a WORD!!!

Please, yours eagerly.
Rakz.. Xx
Bobbyharlequin_gen on January 20th, 2009 05:08 am (UTC)
I serisoully wish i could write angst as well as you.
I loved your song, it was beautiful.
I did almost cry when i misread the last paragraph, i was like...serisoully did she leave a killer cliff hanger....but he nodded and that was enough! literally for me and Will lol.
I cannot wait for the next chapter..in fact o think i voted for it lol